Show not tell

As the wind brushed against her face her soft red lips soon began to form a wide smile.    It had been a long time since she felt joy overfill her heart. Her eyes widen with joy, the thought that she just came home to a surprise was more than amazing.  There was only one word to express her feeling, happy.

Colour changing cats quick write

For today's quick write we had 5 minutes to create a piece of writing about an inventor. The sentence starter that was given to us was: "The cats out of the bag now"

“The cats out of the bag now”  whispered Sven. Sven is actually Bill Nye the science guy in disguise.  Sven had made cats that change colours when you tap them, Sven made his terrific invention 6 months earlier.   Sven and his “sidekick” Eric went to the NYC science lab and put the cats they stole from a crazy cat lady into a machine.  The machine looked perfect, but once they had pressed a button to start it up everything started to malfunction. A few sparks leapt out onto Sven’s $12000 Gucci lab coat and burned 3 holes in it, after a few hours the cats came out.  They looked normal at first but when they touched them they changed colours. That’s how Sven and Eric ended up with colour changing cats today.

Pauline and the Perseid

LO: use adjectives and adverbs to make the reader want to continue reading. 

Word of the day: Perseid 

“ Leave me alone, I’m about to watch the lights on the sky!” Pauline bellowed.  Pauline is an ignorant 22 year old that still lives with her parents that are about to turn to dust and always wants things to go her way, no matter what.  Pauline wanted to watch the Perseid that was about to happen. Perseid only happens once a year in August and it’s very rare. “ Pauline Crellie Jones come here at this instant!” Yelled her mum.  

“ But I want to see the Perseid!!”

“Who cares”

As soon as her mum said that the Perseid happened. Pauline ran as quick as a lightning bolt, when she eventually reached her destination which was the hill, she was too late.

Quick write setting

The air is full of silence and deadliness in this ghost town.  All the trees have already started to rot and fade away, the ground is dim and dull.  The sky is never blue, no one else is here except for one person… me. Everyone had vanished off to somewhere else to escape the invasion.  The last thing I heard were screams of children getting kidnapped.

LO: We were asked to write a piece of writing that explained a setting

Quick write

I had ten minutes to create a back story for my paperback writer.

Appearance 

He has one strand of hair on his head, he only wears Gucci from head to toe and he is chubby.  He has the thickest mono brow in the world and he has 2 moles on one side of his face.

Personality 

He is a moody little poo and he is so selfish, he only cares about 3 things which is Gucci, food and vespine music. 

Actions

Whenever he is sad he eats food to cheer him up, he has also been to jail for kidnapping Lil Tay.

How did he change over time?

He gets fatter and obsessed with Lil Tay and vespine music, he went to a vespine music concert and discovered that he is into vespine music. 

Nelly Noodles the paperback writer

This here was a 5 minute quick write with a learning outcome of creating a character.

Nelly Noodles always wanted to write stories ever since he was a little fellow.  When he was 9 years old he always “accidentally” got into accidents, he chopped off his leg while juggling chainsaws, his cat bit off his nose.  He had nearly died 10 times, he thought to himself “ what if I write a book about all of my accidents” He wasn’t a professional author so he became a PAPERBACK WRITER!

Quick write

Billy Bobby Jones is a very famous synchronised swimmer and he has never ever made a single mistake in his entire life.  He has won 22 gold medals, 3 silver medals and 1 bronze medal. He is that talented he has only won 1 bronze medal, one day BBJ was assigned to go to Argentina for the synchronised swimming Olympics.  

Quick write

I only had 5 minutes to create this quick write, so it isn't that descriptive.

My friend and I walked along the path leading up to a miniature waterfall, well that’s what we thought it was.  When we saw the “waterfall” we got extremely excited, we weren’t planning on swimming but we did in the end. We jumped over the electric fence to get into the paddock, we ran fast but then we realised we had to take photos because it was so beautiful.  We kept running until we reached our destination at last, we had an amazing idea to put our heads in it to see.  When we went swimming there were rapids and they were leonine.