Rapunzel Sentence

Sentence:  She scolded him fiercely for daring to enter and steal from her garden

My Version:  The cold mysterious rotten smell filled the warm air.  As the dead Autumn leaves crunched beneath his feet his eyes finally met with the mysterious ‘creature’.  Little did he know that it wasn’t a creature, it was indeed the owner. She scolded at him as if he had killed one of her loved ones.  Their neighbour had an old wrinkled face that terrified all of the villagers.